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Here is another work in progress to show how a page comes together. You can watch and see how I will keep certain things and scrap others. This is a redo of page 7 which you can see in my gallery. I just didn't feel the page was good enough to keep so I am giving one more shot. Let me know what you think. I'm all ears! 
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactI liked this page but I don't love it; the flow of the intial image that blends into the panel was confusing. I went back and looked at the first version of the pencils to understand that it was a framing image. Maybe a break there to show that he is telling a story? I think the design on the aliens is overall very solid and I really like the flow of action in panels 2-5. Panel 4 which is still very "unfinished" looks a little less dynamic than the rest. I like the image in the final panel with the spear, but based on the action I don't feel that the other aliens could be behind him. I think they would still be on the other side of the panel....Lastly I think the crosshatching on the arm at the bottom is a little off. I like what you bone in other pages better than in that paticular spot. Hope I wasnt too harsh; I'm looking forward to seeing more!